"The writer who possesses the creative gift owns something of which he is not always master- something that at times strangely wills and works for itself." Charlotte Bronte
Tuesday, June 3, 2014
Sentence Imitation
Trees flew through the air like laundry from a clothes line. Other stuff too - rocks, branches, an old rowboat. A flurry of pink flags whipped past my eyes.
(Ultra by David Carroll p. 159)
Fire rampaged through the city like an inferno tearing through a palace. Many things burnt- buildings, trees, the new hospital. A stream of ashes rushed past my ears.
Ice soared past us like we were in a giant snowglobe. Other stuff too- branches, hats from people's heads, a small snowman. A hurricane of white snowflakes made it hard to see.
Chubs soared through the trees like a big black airplane. Other stuff too- leaves, beat-boxing pandas, Chubs jr. Two silver feet landed on my head and knocked me over.
I hope that all the Gr.5 girls get the part about the beat-boxing panda!
Waves crashed through the flood gates like Americans when the stores open on Black Friday. Other debris too - fish, twigs, an old shoe. A chorus of screams filled my ears.
Houses soared across the sky like ducks fleeing from a stray soccer ball. Smaller stuff too - trucks, trees, garbage cans. A murmuration of severed branches flew just in front of my face.
Sara M. "That was better then my last one, wasn't it?"
Ice chunks fell from the sky like gigantic snowflakes. Everything around was yet to be battered - luxury cars, flowers in full bloom, toys that were left out. People scrambled to cover and protect their belongings.
Soldiers ran through the town like a hive of bees. Other people too- bakers, policemen, and small children. A crowd of people in handcuffs stomped past my house as the soldiers knocked down my door.
#1 Stop signs floated on the surface like leaves in a crystal lake.Other stuff too- debris, clothes, an old cradle. A flash of drowned out photos reached my eyes.
#2 Wind whipped at my face hard like a blow-dryer on high. Other stuff too- the shivering cold, sharp glass, a child's toy. A flurry of leaves shocked me.
1. Snow covered everything like a cold, frosty blanket. Everything had a sheet of ice on it- cars, streets, my nose. A flurry of snow from the roof hit me in the face as I was walking home.
2. Flames rose around me like a bright wall. I used everything I could find to take out the fire- mud, leaves, my sweater. A flurry of sparks burned into my skin, but it didn't hurt at all.
Beth and anyone else that knows Beth and me's story should get the reference of #2.
Crystels zipped throgh the wind like airplanes at the speed of light. Other stuff too- glass, people, a rusty basketball net. A gust of fish zoomed past me.
Lightning split through the sky making it look like broken glass. Other things were in the air too- ashed, flames on trees, charred branches fell. A stampede of animals thundered past me while they tried to escape.
Water crashed onto ramshackle beach houses as if it were a tiny ant. Other things too - cars, the giant rocks, my home. I rushed to gather all my supplies for survival before my life flashed before my eyes.
# 1 Smoke curled from the dragon's mouth like a coil of grey ribbon. The flame destroyed everything - a patch of bright flowers, small animals, a leftover sword from a forgotten battle. A group of knights pushed past me, swords aimed at the beast.
# 2 Bruise-like rings covered my arms and legs like thirsty leeches. Other people too - a baker, a mechanic, a surprised old man. Med-droids swarmed me, lifting me onto a gurney and wheeling me away to the quarantines.
Explosions went through the earth like drills go through the ground. Many other things too- Nukes, vehicles, Buildings. A death sentence stood in front of my eyes.
Ashes gracefully blew through the air like black rose petals. Other stuff to - fiery sparks, boiling magma, and red flames. A crowd of desperate people darted past me, into the murky waters of Honolulu.
Lava spread on the ground like milk knocked off a table. Lots of things burned- people, plants, a wooden house. A vision of me burning was in my head.
Lots of things sucked in like a tornado on a on a plain field. Tons of objects- people, tools, an astronaut helmet. A blizzard of meteorites flew in the black hole
A wall of heat hit me like an actually wall, as I walked outside. Everything was dying from the heat - flowers, grass, even the leaves on trees. A tired, dehydrated stray cat leaped right past me on the sidewalk.
The earth shook like a shivering child. Other stuff too - trees, houses, and a tall apartment building. A large cloud of debris made it hard to breathe.
Fire rampaged through the city like an inferno tearing through a palace.
ReplyDeleteMany things burnt- buildings, trees, the new hospital.
A stream of ashes rushed past my ears.
Ice soared past us like we were in a giant snowglobe. Other stuff too- branches, hats from people's heads, a small snowman. A hurricane of white snowflakes made it hard to see.
ReplyDeleteChubs soared through the trees like a big black airplane. Other stuff too- leaves, beat-boxing pandas, Chubs jr. Two silver feet landed on my head and knocked me over.
I hope that all the Gr.5 girls get the part about the beat-boxing panda!
His feet are gray, not silver!
DeleteWaves crashed through the flood gates like Americans when the stores open on Black Friday. Other debris too - fish, twigs, an old shoe. A chorus of screams filled my ears.
ReplyDeleteHouses soared across the sky like ducks fleeing from a stray soccer ball. Smaller stuff too - trucks, trees, garbage cans. A murmuration of severed branches flew just in front of my face.
ReplyDeleteSara M. "That was better then my last one, wasn't it?"
Ice chunks fell from the sky like gigantic snowflakes. Everything around was yet to be battered - luxury cars, flowers in full bloom, toys that were left out. People scrambled to cover and protect their belongings.
ReplyDeleteSoldiers ran through the town like a hive of bees. Other people too- bakers, policemen, and small children. A crowd of people in handcuffs stomped past my house as the soldiers knocked down my door.
ReplyDeleteW&W reference!
#1
ReplyDeleteStop signs floated on the surface like leaves in a crystal lake.Other stuff too- debris, clothes, an old cradle. A flash of drowned out photos reached my eyes.
#2
Wind whipped at my face hard like a blow-dryer on high. Other stuff too- the shivering cold, sharp glass, a child's toy. A flurry of leaves shocked me.
Blocks flew past my house like a paper airplane in the wind. Other stuff too - trees, mobs, tools. My life flashed before my eyes
ReplyDelete:) Minecraft
Blocks flew past my house like a paper airplane in the wind. Other stuff too - trees, mobs, tools. My life flashed before my eyes.
DeleteSorry I forgot period
houses fell down like soldiers in the war. Other stuff too- rocks, cars, a large tree. A violent shake form the ground broke the road.
ReplyDeleteMy kite flew through the air like a eager bird. Other stuff too - leaves, twigs, even an old mans hat. A flurry of dirt was blown into my eyes.
ReplyDelete1. Snow covered everything like a cold, frosty blanket. Everything had a sheet of ice on it- cars, streets, my nose. A flurry of snow from the roof hit me in the face as I was walking home.
ReplyDelete2. Flames rose around me like a bright wall. I used everything I could find to take out the fire- mud, leaves, my sweater. A flurry of sparks burned into my skin, but it didn't hurt at all.
Beth and anyone else that knows Beth and me's story should get the reference of #2.
Crystels zipped throgh the wind like airplanes at the speed of light. Other stuff too- glass, people, a rusty basketball net. A gust of fish zoomed past me.
ReplyDeleteLightning split through the sky making it look like broken glass. Other things were in the air too- ashed, flames on trees, charred branches fell. A stampede of animals thundered past me while they tried to escape.
ReplyDelete~Mackie
Water crashed onto ramshackle beach houses as if it were a tiny ant. Other things too - cars, the giant rocks, my home. I rushed to gather all my supplies for survival before my life flashed before my eyes.
ReplyDeleteP.S. I'm Arabella.
DeleteGunfire hit our ears like nails on a chalkboard. More than that-blood, fortresses, machine guns. a pile of bodies lay across the beach.
ReplyDeleteFact: that is a deflated version of what happened.
this ias not: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pCLJhxfj608&feature=kp
# 1 Smoke curled from the dragon's mouth like a coil of grey ribbon. The flame destroyed everything - a patch of bright flowers, small animals, a leftover sword from a forgotten battle. A group of knights pushed past me, swords aimed at the beast.
ReplyDelete# 2 Bruise-like rings covered my arms and legs like thirsty leeches. Other people too - a baker, a mechanic, a surprised old man. Med-droids swarmed me, lifting me onto a gurney and wheeling me away to the quarantines.
(The second one is based off of the book Cinder)
Explosions went through the earth like drills go through the ground. Many other things too- Nukes, vehicles, Buildings. A death sentence stood in front of my eyes.
ReplyDeleteAshes gracefully blew through the air like black rose petals. Other stuff to - fiery sparks, boiling magma, and red flames. A crowd of desperate people darted past me, into the murky waters of Honolulu.
ReplyDelete-Aidan
Lava spread on the ground like milk knocked off a table. Lots of things burned- people, plants, a wooden house. A vision of me burning was in my head.
ReplyDeleteLots of things sucked in like a tornado on a on a plain field. Tons of objects- people, tools, an astronaut helmet. A blizzard of meteorites flew in the black hole
A wall of heat hit me like an actually wall, as I walked outside. Everything was dying from the heat - flowers, grass, even the leaves on trees. A tired, dehydrated stray cat leaped right past me on the sidewalk.
ReplyDeleteThe earth shook like a shivering child. Other stuff too - trees, houses, and a tall apartment building. A large cloud of debris made it hard to breathe.
ReplyDelete