The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to
borrow one of their arms.
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Friday, February 23, 2018
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Original (From J.K. Rowling’s Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows):
ReplyDeleteThe faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
Mine:
The heads around him showed nothing but alarm; he might have shouted that he wanted to run into fire.
Sentence Modelling
ReplyDeleteHarry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
J.K. Rowling:The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
S.J. Choist: The professors around him expressed nothing but curiosity; he might have claimed that he wanted to debunk Einstein.
Words that I changed: faces-professors, displayed-expressed, shock-curiosity, announced-claimed, 'he wanted to borrow one of their arms'-he wanted to debunk Einstein.
Sentence Modelling
ReplyDeleteHarry Potter and the Deathly Hallows by: J.K Rowling
Original: The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
Changed: The potions around him demonstrated nothing but colours; he might have thought that he wanted to drink one of them.
Sentence modelling!
ReplyDeleteOriginal sentence from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, by J.K Rowling.
"The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms."
My sentence!
The shadows around him generated nothing but sorrow; he might have triggered the thought that he wanted to curse the world with eternal misery.
Hope you enjoyed!
-Maksim Thomas
Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows
ReplyDeleteThe faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
-J.K. Rowling
The people around him showed nothing but fear; he might have said that he wanted to bring in Voldemort.
-Dennis Bince
From Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows by J.K. Rowling
ReplyDeleteThe faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
My Version
The creepy voices around him harassed and tortured him, and it made him feel nothing but scared; he might have felt that he wanted to have a dementor in front of him instead of these creepy voices around him.
Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows by: J.K. Rowling
ReplyDeleteThe dogs around him did nothing but growl; he might have said that he wanted to take their frisbee.
From Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows by J.K. Rowling-
ReplyDeleteThe faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
My Version-
The EXPRESSIONS around him REVEALED nothing but DEPRESSION; he might of SAID that he wanted to PUT THEM IN THERAPY.
Original: The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
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Mine: The pigs around him were nothing but adorable: he might have thought that he wanted to celebrate National Pig Day with them.
By: Raquel DeSousa
Original: The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to
ReplyDeleteborrow one of their arms.
Mine: the dogs around him showed nothing but playfulness; he might have declared that he wanted to play fetch.
Original: The faces around him displayed nothing but shock; he might have announced that he wanted to borrow one of their arms.
ReplyDeleteMine: The mosquitoes around him were nothing but annoying; he might have forgotten that he wanted to put on some repellent.