"The writer who possesses the creative gift owns something of which he is not always master- something that at times strangely wills and works for itself." Charlotte Bronte
Tuesday, May 12, 2015
Sentence Modelling
The dark sky, filled withangry, swirling clouds, reflectedGreg Ridley'smood ashe sat on the stoop of his building.
The original sentence: The dark sky, filled with angry, swirling clouds, reflected Greg Ridley's mood as he sat on the stoop of his building.
The Treasure of Lemon Brown by Walter Dean Myers
My sentence: The stars of space, filled with dark, gloomy figures, reflected Larry Bob's mood as he blew up Neptune and Pluto up with TNT (Pronounced Tint)
The bright sun, filled with beautiful, bright rays, reflected Aidan Hess's mood as he played with his big brother in his backyard.
ReplyDeleteThe clear water, filled with vibrant, colourful fish, reflected my mood as I lay in the shimmering sand.
ReplyDeleteThat is all.
Thank you, thank you very much.
~Eileen
The original sentence: The dark sky, filled with angry, swirling clouds, reflected Greg Ridley's mood as he sat on the stoop of his building.
ReplyDeleteThe Treasure of Lemon Brown by Walter Dean Myers
My sentence: The stars of space, filled with dark, gloomy figures, reflected Larry Bob's mood as he blew up Neptune and Pluto up with TNT (Pronounced Tint)
Sentence Moddeling;
Lucas Silvestri
Sorry, grammar mistake, there is no "up" after "Pluto".
ReplyDeleteMy first sentence:
ReplyDeleteThe blue pools, filled with occasional, subtle ripples, reflected Amelia Austen's mood as she walked along the boundary of the park.
My second sentence:
The yummy ice cream, filled with delicious, delectible topppings, reflected Chubs jr.'s mood as he tucked into his delicious bowl of dessert.
Note: Amelia Austen is a character in my short story.