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Monday, January 12, 2015

Sentence Modelling

"My name is India Opal Buloni, and last summer my daddy, the preacher, sent me to the store for a box of macaroni-and-cheese, some white rice, and two tomatoes and I came back with a dog."

Opening sentence to Because of Winn-Dixie by Kate DiCamillo

22 comments:

  1. My name is Xavier Alejandro Ibañez-Padron, and last fall, Notch, the creator, sent me to the cave for a stack of iron ore, some gold, and twelve diamonds and I came home with a wolf.

    It was already dark as night; the lava flowed hatefully against the cobblestone, and my strength was almost gone, when, by the shine of the burning hot lava, I saw the dark green skin of the creeper pulse; it blinked white, and a sizzling sound filled the cave.

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    2. Nice work! Please post your second sentence with the sentence you modelled it after.

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  3. This one is me talking

    My name is Eileen Mary Grant, and last winter my sister, the snow freak, sent me to the backyard for a snowman, some snowballs, and a snow fort, and I came back with frostbite.

    And this one is Sylvester the cat. (from Looney Tunes)

    My name is Sylvester J. Pussycat, and last year, my father, the bird wrangler, sent me to the house of tweety bird for breakfast, some lunch, and dinner, and I came back with no life.

    And now the Frankenstein one:

    It was already almost broken; the colourful strips of paper caught on the tree branch, and my sister was taking her turn, when, by the sparkle of the shining sun, I saw the strings of the piñata blow; she took her swing, and the rainbow donkey spewed candy, for everyone to eat.

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  4. “My name is Lucas Silvestri, and last winter my Great-Great-Great-Great-Grandfather, the oldest man in the world, sent me to the dungeon for a 45-year-old prisoner, some rotten keys, and an ugly jar of eyeballs and I came back with 19,000,000,000 rubber hockey pucks, a Jonathan Bernier jersey, and sixteen hockey sticks.”

    It was already another sunny day; the light shone cheerfully against the brick wall, and my mother was in my closet getting my clothes, when, by the gleaming of the morning sun, I saw the door of the washroom open wider and, a small gray alien stumbled out. -Lucas

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  5. 1.My name is Noah Michael Hess,and last winter my mom, the astronaut, sent me to Mars for a sample of sand and rocks, her rover, and red dust and I came back with an alien.

    2.It was becoming harder to breathe; the fog thickened unwilling fully in the forest;and my eyes were hurting so much, when, by the roots of the great red tree, I saw the big black face of the dragon emerge from the shadows; it growled loudly, and a big paw, filled with claws, was swung at me.

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  6. My name is Ronan James Groleau and last week my mom, the dog walker, sent me to the pet shop for a bone, some dog cookies, and a dog plush and I came back with a pet pig.

    I'ts a viscous dragon, Link, fighting it with a weapon. You stand in the doorway and if you don't stay quick there's no knowing that you will make it out alive
    (Hyrule warriors :3)


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    1. Your sentences are well written, but you have some corrections to make.
      - It's,vicious
      - add a period

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  7. My sentence modeling!:

    Because of Winn-Dixie one:

    "My name is Kieran Calling Watters, and last winter my fish, the gold kind, sent my to space for a watch, some scrap metal and a laser and I came back with a time machine."

    The lord of the rings one:

    "You're a weird object, mirror, copying me all the time. I move my hand, and if you don't move your hand, there's no knowing what creature you are."

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  9. My name is David L. N., and last summer, my mother, the accountant, sent me to the store for a bottle of water, some chicken nuggets, and fourteen packets of frozen noodles, and I came back with a "Grumpy Cat" poster.

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  10. My name is Richard Duke Bullpit, and last summer, Pitbull, my father, sent me to the jewelry store for diamonds, some rubies, and twenty-one emeralds, and I came back with a little pig.

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  11. Hobbit:
    It's a great responsibility, Welgog, being the Prince. You assume the title, and if you don't stay put, there's no knowing what direction they'll pull you.
    Frankenstein:
    It was already midnight; the warrior stood gallantly on the balcony of the castle, and my sword was nearly stained completely with blood, when, by the shimmer of my sword, I saw the proud glorious flag of my empire burn; it faded away, and a murderous screech split the air.

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  12. "Because of Winn-Dixie" by Kate DiCamillo:
    My name is Ella May Waters, and last year my friend, the penguin, sent me to the market for a can of tuna fish, some pink salmon, and three cod fish and I came back with a pie.

    "Frankenstein' by Mary Shelley:
    It was already getting horribly difficult; the water crashed loudly against the rocks, when, by the shadow if the rotting tree, I saw the small, dark silhouette of the lion-cat appear; it jogged delicately, and then it slunk behind the overgrown hedge.

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  13. Because of Winn-Dixie
    My name is Arabella Izen Bareno and last night Aaron, my brother, sent me to Toys R Us for a spaceship, some Lego blocks and five video games and I came back with a Barbie doll.

    Hobbit
    It's a wild current, Morveren, tonight in the ocean. You step into the water, and if you don't see the Mer, there's no knowing where you'll end up in the ocean.
    (Based on a book I read named Stormswept)

    ~Arabella c:

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  14. Because of Winn-Dixie:

    My Sentence:
    My name is Natalie Anne Nusca, and last Christmas, 2014, I asked for an iPad mini, some new clothes, and money and, after Christmas, all I came back to school with was coal.

    Frankenstein:

    It was already My Sentence:
    My name is Natalie Anne Nusca, and last Christmas, 2014, I asked for an ipad mini, some new clothes, and money and, after Christmas, all I came back to school with was coal.

    Frankenstein:

    My Sentence:
    My name is Natalie Anne Nusca, and last Christmas, 2014, I asked for an ipad mini, some new clothes, and money and, after Christmas, all I came back to school with was coal.

    Frankenstein:

    It was already 11:59 in the night: my fingers gently tapping against my thigh, and the only sound that could be heard was the clock ticking, which was waiting with me in the room, when, by the faint little sound of a babies cry, I saw a tired out nurse open the loud creaky door; she breathed heavily and quietly said, "Natalie, come see your new baby sister."

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  15. (By the way, neither of the sentences I did are true.)

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  16. Because of Winn Dixie:
    “My name is Jaime Linh Nguyen-Truong, and last week my daddy, the nice guy, sent me to the park for a friend I can play with, some flowers, and maybe another friend, and I came back with an enemy. *Note: not a true story

    Lord of The Rings:
    It’s a scary feeling, flying, looking down and seeing people. You draw a deep breath, and if you don’t pay close attention, there’s no knowing where you will be blown of to.

    Frankenstein:
    It was already bright and beautiful outside, the sun shone radiantly on the field, and my bedroom was glimmering when, by the light of the bright sunlight, I saw the big black storm of the sky rumble; it shook violently, and a rough shake started the storm.

    Thanks for Reading!
    ~Jaime

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